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Topic:In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.在一些国家年轻人被鼓励在完成高中学习和开始大学学习之间工作或者旅行一年。讨论年轻人决定这样做的优点和缺点。
第一段：It is quite common these days for young people in many countries to have a break from studying after graduating from high school(it 引导的形式主语从句). The trend is not restricted to rich students who have the money to travel, but is also evident among poorer students who choose to work and become economically independent (副词的使用)for a period of time.
第二段：The reasons for this trend may involve the recognition that a young adult who passes directly from school to university is rather restricted in terms of general knowledge and experience of the world. By contrast(介词短语), those who have spent some time earning a living or travelling to other places, have a broader view of life and better personal resources to draw on. They tend to be more independent, which is a very important factor in academic study and research(非限定性定语从句), as well as(连词) giving(分词作状语) them an advantage in terms of coping with the challenges of student life.
第三段：However(副词), there are certainly dangers in taking time off at that important age. Young adults may end up never returning to their studies or finding it difficult to readapt to an academic environment. They may think different from a university course. But overall, I think this is less likely today, when(when引导的非限定性定语从句) academic qualifications are essential for getting a reasonable career.
最后一段：My view is that (表语从句)young people should be encouraged to broaden their horizons.That is the best way for them to get a clear perspective of what(what 引导的名词性从句) they are hoping to do with their lives and why. Students with such a perspective are usually the most effective and motivated ones and(并列句) taking a year off (动名词短语做主语) may be the best way to gain this.
1.贴近话题以及亮点词汇: economically independent, general knowledge, experience of the world, view of life, personal resources, academic study, readapt, academic qualifications, horizons, perspective, effective and motivated,
It做形式主语的主语从句：It is quite common these days for young people in many countries to have a break from studying after graduating from high school.
表语从句：My view is that young people should be encouraged to broaden their horizons.
非限定性定语从句：They tend to be more independent, which is a very important factor in academic study and research, …
现在分词作状语：as well as(连词) giving them an advantage in terms of coping with the challenges of student life.
what 引导的名词性从句: That is the best way for them to get a clear perspective of what they are hoping to do with their lives and why.
动名词短语做主语：Students with such a perspective are usually the most effective and motivated ones and(并列句) taking a year off may be the best way to gain this. (并列句)